I had a guest review over on ffn today for my one shot, The End.
The was terribly sad and unnecessary. Wish I hadn’t read it. This could of ended so much better but your ending was super bad and dumb.
I can understand someone not liking a story, really. There are plenty out there that I don’t like as well but if that’s the case I cut my losses and leave the story rather than a review. Why? Over there there’s no way to tell, just by looking at the numbers, whether the reviews are good, bad or indifferent and I don’t want to add any more of my presence to a story I didn’t enjoy than I already have (clicking the link counts as visiting the story).
Since it’s a guest review I can’t reply back to them and ask what they didn’t like about it. Since it’s in my top 5 of the one shots I’ve written (along with The House Always Wins, Sookie’s Gift and Looney Tooney) that I actually enjoy reading time and time again I can’t understand.
Maybe it’s because I don’t WANT to understand?
In both the books and the show Sookie didn’t evolve, or if she did she quickly devolved. She did stupid shit that didn’t get her anything but more heartbreak. She didn’t get the guy, she didn’t get the HEA I feel she should have had.
Mind you, Eric didn’t really have an HEA either.
They never spoke again after he talked to her to get her to talk to the douche.
In my opinion, and others considering the reviews I got on here for The End, they needed that last conversation. They needed closure.
Eric needed to let her know that she HAD hurt him and that he was moving on with his life and he wanted her to do the same.
What would you call a relationship where the participants couldn’t communicate? Where they were either constantly arguing or having make up sex? A relationship that your family and friends didn’t approve of?
I’ve been there, done that and own the damn t-shirt store!
It was time Eric took back the reigns in his own life and got on with the business of living instead of mourning that which was never really his to begin with. sigh
It was time he took his balls back from both Sookie and Pam and started being a man again! smile
Would I have liked it if he had told her he would be there when she was ready to move on? Hell yeah but in my eyes it would have still been more of the same: Miscommunication and toxicity.
I know at least one person asked for a sequel of sorts and I am working on it. It’ll be part of a writing challenge (not allowed to say which one) so it’ll be a while before you see it but it is in the works.
Thank you kelpie for this idea.
For all you writers out there, and maybe not writers, but does other people’s writing/speaking drives you bonkers?
Things like mixing up your and you’re or their, there and they’re.
sammich for sandwish
chimley for chimney
thrown for throne (thank you kelpie, lol)
words that should have an apostrophe s rather than just an s at the end
Shall I go on?
Sound off people, please :). I like the interaction and I truly do want to know what some of your pet peeves are so I don’t commit them, lol.